Mind Control Story Comments

Incredibly hot, it will be worth waiting for the next chapter.

There could definitely be more to this one.

Truly one of the few joys in this life

Need to change the synopsis to alpha bitch takes control of rivals and humiliates them. 7 chapters in and there's still no revenge. I'm already bored and can't wait to see how this trash fire is put out

Decent setup, clear style in first chapter, hot. Can't ask for much more!

And their likeness was never seen again.

Alas for nineteen years.

Wild. A bit hard to follow some bits. But still some great, crazy world building.

Brilliant job as per usual Novalist!

Heads up though. For some reason your new "next part" that should be clickable at the end of each chapter, (underneath where it says: READ MORE OF THIS SERIES) never shows up for this series whenever you have a new chapter. It's very odd. So...

Would you be okay with me finishing God App?

And thank you for writing! Sad to see you may go.

which path is folowing the world on this stories ?

We are blessed to get a completed story from instead of leaving us blueballed with cliffhanger.

Quality lesfic😝. You have something their❗This is one of those stories that you can add to because of the element of the draw of the product used to draw in the subjects😝😜😋🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥❗

I stayed up waaaay past when I needed to be asleep due to that fight. Thank you, for sharing.

Wow talk about cliffhangers❗they don't come any more incomplete than yours😡❗.

If you are holding back waiting to see how good of a response to this story. I for one loved this beginning😝😜😋.🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥.

“ Abuse her, humiliate her, torture her friends and family right in front of her, and she'd still be utterly besotted.

(I had less than no interest in such macabre pursuits, but still, it was nice to have room to operate.)”

Shit.

great start! can't wait to see what's next!

WOW WTF MAN WE WANT ALOT MORE OF THIS STORY PLEAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAASE

Great story but I almost missed the posting of this chapter because it wasn’t tagged. There are so many good Quaranteam stories that the only way I can keep up with them is to search for the Quaranteam tag! This one doesn’t have one…

Excellent chapter

Are you planning a story set kn the future

This tale begs for a series where each of Melanie's "friends" find a new occupational direction at the casino!

Anything yet?

This series has to be one of my favourites on this site. It hits all right spots for me. Love it!

Can't wait for the next chapters.

Oh wow, this short story was absolutely worth the wait. I know you've said you'll write more for your characters from other stories. But please say you'll do more or these characters. There's part of me that does feel sorry for Avani... I'd still like her to be treated well by those...

I will admit I also found a disconnect in the women's emotions.

Women are wired significantly differently from guys and with Stacy being a committed virgin, not disregarding her partner's involvement, for her to do such a dramatic turnaround is wrong.

The MCs mind-control abilities...

This is so good! I wish you'd make a part two!!!

An amazing fantasy, well told.

Fun story.

Ive been waiting a wee while for your 47k words chapter , 13 pages on lit. And it did not dissapoint. Brilliant , keep up the great work looking forward to the next chapter.

Only about 1% over the top. Very enjoyable

You my friend are a bloody genius this story just keeps getting better and better I mean all 13 pages were fantastic and I can’t wait for the next instalment 10 stars easily.

So good, so erotic. They don't even have sex and it's just so erotic. Why isn't there more of this?

I love it so far...please, please, please bring more to this site...please and thank you.

How in the world did the author make clothes shopping erotic? Like son very erotic. I am hooked on the story too. I am very disappointed this story hasn't been updated.

Story ideas in case the author has writer's Block:

Now that Levi was punked out at the mall, he has to commit...